The group of kids rushing into the subway car
at the Union Street station was like a herd of thirsty antelope stampeding to
the first watering hole they had spotted in ages. Most of the adults on the
previously silent subway car that morning groaned or rolled their eyes at the
children’s antics. A simple field trip was certainly no reason to behave in
such an uncouth manner, particularly so early in the morning! But the woman
with the warm brown eyes smiled and was filled with joy because she imagined
that she was still one of them; that now she was truly among her own kind.
Seeing these children - with entire lives of limitless possibilities lying
ahead of them – gave her hope that her now mundane life could still retain some
of its original spontaneity and excitement.
This is a great sketch -- very true to the "slice of life" concept, I think. Just a small piece of life from that day that seemed to lift itself up in our field of attention. Strong diction and the opening simile are excellent features here. Nice! :)
ReplyDeleteI love this sketch. My favorite phrase is "lives of limitless possibilities."
ReplyDeleteWatching people at train stations (or airports) gives an opportunity to observe, notice and come up with stories.
I love how much you notice here in a very small moment in time.
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